KosteleckyS VisualPoem from Kapaa Middle School MEDIA on Vimeo.
My poem is about time flying bye, and how it is easy to lose track of time. I thought that my poem was ok but when i added the visual I was like wow its a lot better that I thought it would be. I thought that best thing about my poem visual was all the time lapse's and some of the pictures.
My special effects make the meaning of my poem stronger by putting more movement in a good way. Like I put transitions in to attract peoples attention. I could make my visual poem video better by putting more translations changes.
Im satisfied with my results and I think that I could put in more lines into my video and also put more translations. I would also make it longer by creating more lines and putting more translates in were there isn't as much as I wanted.
Hey Seth. I really like how your poem was written because it made us think a little bit more about life and the ending leaves us on a satisfying note. I think you could have worked on the emotion on your voice because it was kinda mono-tone. I also really liked your B-Roll was it was absolutely stunning especially those lapses. It looked awesome. Keep up the good work Seth!
ReplyDeleteNice sequencing. Ken burns is to fast. Good natural sounds.
ReplyDelete- I liked how you made the poem rhyme.
ReplyDelete- Maybe you could've used more video b-roll instead of pictures.
- I also liked how you added digital effects to the pictures.
I like how you had the cool clip of the rain coming in.
ReplyDeleteNext time try to read it with more enthusiasm. It sounded like you were just reading it off a paper.
Great job though!
Nice poem! I like your poem because we can relate to it. You could of got some b-roll to match your poems. Also you could of slowed down the ken burns effect because its way to fast. Great job though seth!
ReplyDeleteI liked the nice shot you had. The b-roll didn't really match in my eyes. Your voiceover was really clear and understandable.
ReplyDeleteyou had great clear sound.
ReplyDeleteA few of your pictures went by fast.
you had 2 great timelapse.
Great shots, time lapses, and awesome effects
ReplyDeleteMaybe could've fixed the speed of your wave sounds and the speed of your pictures and your kens burn ( slow it down a little )
I really liked your shots and your audio is excellent and this is a well done visual poem.
Good job! Your use of transitions was good. I think that you could have slowed down a little when filming your voiceover because it was a little hard to understand what you were saying at some parts. I also liked how you got shots and clips at a lot of different places.
ReplyDeleteYour rhyme scheme sounded very thought out and planned
ReplyDeleteYou spoke in a bit of a monotone and some of the visuals were unneeded
I could hear you very clearly and your sound effects were pretty great
I enjoyed the "Past and present" part, it's a great quote.
ReplyDeleteThere could have been more b-roll and added music.
Over all, the poem was written well.
Your b-role was very clear and your voiceovers were easy to hear.
ReplyDeleteSome of the so8=und effects were a bit loud, and you did not read with much expression. Also, the b-role really did not match what you were saying.
i liked it a lot overall... Great Job Srethstafon!!!
I loved your variety of B-Roll, you had a lot of great shots. One thing that could be improved would probably be your voice-over. You could try reading with a bit more expression towards the end to really bring out the poem. Great job on the text-layovers, they were accurately timed so they matched your audio, and I thought they helped the final product.
ReplyDeleteNice poem, you read it clearly and I could understand what you were saying perfectly. Some of your Ken Burns effects were a bit fast though, maybe you could've slowed them down. Nice text layovers, great poem!
ReplyDeleteYou have great beginning love the time lapse! Next time use b-roll that relates to what your saying. Your poem is so amazing! Its like really deep which is really great! GOOD JOB!
ReplyDeleteHi Seth, nice poem. I really liked how clear your voice was. One thing you can do to make your video is to take out the sound effects as it is kind of distracting. Another thing I liked about your visual poem is your subtitles.
ReplyDeletei liked the sound and the poem was inspiring.
ReplyDeleteMaybe say it with a little more emotion next time and have video clips.
you read it clearly and i liked the Ken Burns effect
Your voice was clear and I could understand it clearly. Maybe you could've added clips that went with what you were saying instead of clips of the water or trees. Though some of your clips didn't match, they were very nice and beautifully shot.
ReplyDeleteYour poem was well written. Your ken burns effects were too fast which made it hard to watch. The time lapses were nice and showed time passing well.
ReplyDeleteThe poem was well written. It sounded like you weren't happy when you were filming your poem. Good job on the B-roll I like the effect you used of the image of the tree.
ReplyDeleteGreat job Seth! The time lapses were awesome!
ReplyDeleteThere could be more video B-Rolls.
But still, the poem was amazing and was read quite clearly!
Great Job Seth!
Wow Seth! Really enjoyed the story of your poem... it was true and pretty deep.
ReplyDeleteI would recommend putting b-roll shots that relate more to what the narrater is saying.
Liked how you were able to use the special effects and how you were able to put text in the beginning. It really helped.
1.) Good job! I really liked how you gathered a variety of b-roll
ReplyDelete2.) I think you could have lowered some of the sound effects and also slowed down the ken-burns effect.
3.) Over all you did a great job, I also really liked the time lapse on the ocean!
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